Darunia
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Darunia, King of the Gorons
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Post by Darunia on Jun 7, 2006 12:12:51 GMT -5
Walking down the dirt road I fell the sun beaming on my body as I travel down the long road and sweat up a storm. "God this is insane!!" complained Darunia. "I wont even make it to the town at this point." said Darunia sweating like crazy. In the pathway I suddenly see a Deku shrub pop out of the ground and run back the opposite direction.
I look back and see the small Deku run around in confusion. I look back to my pathway and continued on my way until I felt a rumbling quake under my feet. I stand my ground and drop my bags and stand guard, seeing the dry dirt and sand break and spread as a giant sand worm appeared in front of me. "What the hell is this?!!" shouts Darunia. I run away, seeing more and more Deku shrubs run in front of me, away from the worm. "What is going on here?!!" I shouted at the sad worm. I run and attack the worm's neck striking, it with the axe. With that, the worm falls back and squirms on the ground in pain as I strike it in the chest and demand its assistance.
The worm agreed, and I grabbed my bags. I hopped on to it's back. "GO TO LonLon Ranch AND I SHALL REWARD YOU WITH MORE DEKUS WHEN YOU MAKE IT TO OUR DISTENSION!!" demanded Darunia as the worm roared and moved across the sands. "And when i get there I'm going to get something to eat....boy am i starving!" thought Darunia.
OOC: one riding sand worm and destination LonLon Ranch.
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Post by Zabuza on Jun 7, 2006 12:50:17 GMT -5
OOC: I edited most of the mistakes out of this for you. The main problems you have are tense agreement (e.x. walks and walked) and choosing the correct words on the spell check. Still, good effort in all. Remember to refer to the main site for things like Places, Items, and Weapon stuff. If you have any questions, feel free to ask me. Also, send me a message telling me when you get the picture ready.
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