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Post by vash on Aug 26, 2005 17:35:30 GMT -5
When I was 11 my family was murderer by a gang of pirate. I can still see my brother getting stab with a sword over and over again,until he didn't move, he was only 16. They stuck a revolver to to my dads head and with a quick pull of the trigger ,bam he was gone i can still see the blood that spatter across the wall of the ship, all he tried to do was save me and my family.They beat my mom with a chain whip until she was cover in her on blood.Vash wake up in a cold sweat, screaming "aahhhhhhhhh"."Those god damn pirate they made me watch as the slaughtered my family".Cried Vash,tears came to his i eyes as the haunting memory's is relived. Vash yells"I'll get those fucking pirates if i die trying.Burning in hell will seem like childs play after i get through with them.Im going to cut them really slow and make them fill the pain that i have felt for so long."
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Post by Ashram on Aug 26, 2005 17:41:05 GMT -5
OOC: Ok well you're getting somewhat better, however, lay off the curse words...you can easily find some substitutes. Other than that it's better. Use the spell check and read it over when you're done. Nice job......
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